Thursday 12 May 2016

The motordike

Hi My name is Jayden I hop you like it

3 comments:

  1. Hi Jayden I like motor bikes too Jayden. Don't use lots of 'then' at the start of the setence.

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    1. I like it Jayden because it is the best writing about that day of Liams birthday. I liked how you squeezers the motorbike. From Paige.

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  2. Natasha Cartwright20 May 2016 at 15:31

    You had a busy day that day Jay. I like how you are giving lots of detail in your writing

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